The Lightning
The lightning is a villain
He kills people
The lightning is horrifying
Like the devil
The lightning is a blazing star
Rushing round the universe
The lightning is a comet
Leaving a trail of fire
The lightning is a spear
Aiming for you.
by Dennis
May 8, 2015 at 1:01 pm
His poem is amazing and is really well thought out and it is really descriptive and a lot of metaphors and I don’t think any other corrections needed and I really like it and I think there are going to be a lot of positive comments to great poem about lightning.
June 21, 2015 at 7:59 pm
Jose,
It is great to see you encouraging your classmate!
June 21, 2015 at 7:58 pm
I love your use of figurative languages like this simile:
“The lightning is horrifying/
Like the devil”
You have also laid out your work properly in a real poetic format.
Why not try and exert some control over the rhythm now that you have the hang of similes. Remember you can use Similes in prose as well!