“I have no spur
To prick the sides of my
Intent but only
Vaulting ambition which
Overleapt itself and falls on th’other
This means I have no incontinent to prick the sides of my purpose but only vaulting desire which jumps over itself and falls on the other
February 2, 2016 at 12:46 pm
Hi Harry,
I enjoyed reading this. It has a nice style to it.
To improve, please do the following things:
1) Please check all spelling and punctuation throughout. It is inaccurate in some parts.
2) There is some great description at the end of paragraph one and the start of paragraph three. Please try and add some more of this without making the piece too cluttered overall.
At the moment, this sits at 30/40 (C1)
Mr O’B